My Darling Patty

[Ben]

Blood spatters my face
Momentarily blinded
I quell my annoyance
It's not your fault after all
Bending back to my task
I cleave your flesh
And strip you to your soul
Dark are your brown eyes
To the golden neon light
As I take your dignity
And lay you eternally
At an arched and golden altar

[Luck7]

Hi Ben,
The details are gruesome, making the hair stand up at the back of your neck.  Excellent imagery and creative piece.  I really love it.  Take care Luck7

[Ben]

Thanks Luck7,

Glad you found it gruesome and confronting, that was actually my aim.

I wrote this piece when I read about how common it is for over worked slaughterhouses providing to the likes of McDonalds and Burger King, to butcher cattle while still alive. Literally cutting the animal up piece by piece before it dies. Barbaric, cruel and horrible. I'm not against farming cattle mind you, I just think our methods need to be appropriately humane.

[Larsen M Callirhoe]

wow ben yes cruesome and morbid,   very true  the lamb is easily led to the slaughter.

victor

[Hannah]

Chilling, Ben! I wondered where it came from until I read your reply to Lucky7. I can't see any advantage, economic or otherwise to any animal being slaughtered in this way. Think I'll have to educate myself more about this. <shudder>

Hannah

[ForbiddenJoy]

I should of gotten here much earlier - McDonald's immediately came to my mind.  My 3 year old granddaughter, Mckenna loves us to take her to "that other King with the big M". lol
Mckenna has a fascination with the letter "W" and the letter "M".  She loves going to the indoor playroom at "Burger King", but more often we end up going to "McDonald's" because it's near the other stores we shop at.  Burger King is her favorite, but she likes McDonald's too - which she has decided is "the other King".  She is very particular about her choices and opinions.  I believe I have said in other posts - she is very much like me.

The description did sound a bit gruesome, but when you have been raised among farmers it's just a normal part of life. Luckily I don't know any place in our town that slaughters animals still alive. The animals we slaughtered were always very much dead.  It did upset me when I saw them shoot a steer.  They warned me so I could take my daughters inside, but my noisy little ones had to peek outside the window to see what was going on.  I was calling them away just as I heard the shot and saw the steer fall.  It's something I will never forget, and I always hope when people chose to kill an animal they put it to good use and not make it's death a useless death.

I knew there would be some sort of twist in your writing Ben; I have learned that about you.

Joy  

[Bonnie]

Wow, short, sharp and as cutting and savage as the topic. Perfectly horrific.
Good one Ben.
Bonnie

[Ben]

Thanks everyone for commenting on my poem.

Joy are you saying I'm twisted?

Cheers,
Ben.