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« on: July 20, 2010, 05:34:38 AM »

I was sitting in the garden the sun shining down,
When a very "angry wasp" started buzzing around.
He looked at me, i looked at him,
not a chance my Friend i knew he'd win.

So up i jumped heading for the house,
DAD-DAD a wasp! i began to shout.
Well i didn't bargain on a tree being there,
Cried out in pain as it tangled in my hair.

With the wasp on my tail i had to escape,
But i did not see the garden rake.
A very  sore foot and a bruised nose,
I then got tangled in the garden hose.

Was i ever to escape this angry wasp!
Was he going to sting me at any cost?
Had to get to the house and shut the door,
Grab the insect spray now this was war.

One final leap and i was there,
But i then fell over the garden chair.
Finally inside i slammed the door,
But as i reached for the spray
there buzzed four more!!!!!!! Butterfly director's chair
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« Reply #1 on: July 26, 2010, 05:11:51 AM »

very good it flowed  and you wanted to finish thus adventure.  much enjoyed.  victor
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« Reply #2 on: July 29, 2010, 03:59:49 PM »

Hi Dreamer,

Thanks for sharing this fast paced, fun and clumsy adventure. I think many children would enjoy this tale.

 Positive Karma Karma from me.

Cheers,
Ben.
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« Reply #3 on: July 30, 2010, 05:46:29 PM »

 Positive Karma  From me too - even though I am terrified of wasps.  I was stung by one when I was a little girl.
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"Life is a series of wins and losses.  Let the wins be an inspiration for more wins and the losses a challenge to do better next time."
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« Reply #4 on: July 31, 2010, 03:33:43 AM »

Hi dreamer 24.
There can be nothing more funny than watching people trying to swat or run from a wasp. lol!  woohoo
This made me laugh as it was easy to imagine the series of events trying to avoid the dreaded Yellow Jacket whilst colliding headlong into trouble. Very good.
Thank you for sharing it and I look forward to the next.
 Positive Karma From me.

Best regards

Paul

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